Every year, my family and I celebrate the "Patriotic Festivities". Sometimes, we travel to Pichilemu. In this place, we go out to the “ramadas”, where we dance cueca and we eat typical food. This festivity is the funniest national festivity, and it celebrates in all the country. I think it was good for families because it’s a great festivity to enjoy together.
The article refers to the most important festivals of Chile. However in each festival the people give life to every party, they are singing, dancing or praying. All is beautiful , mystical, and happines. I think it is more important the Mapuche new year, because they are our indigenous roots, and we can´t forget them. Finally the article invited everybody to visit Chile.
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Every year, on September 18, Chilean people celebrate the independence day. I think it was good for people who like eat the most traditional foods and know the Chilean culture. I thougth it was awesome. I really recommend it because you can go to partys and fondas, where you can dance “cueca” and drink traditional drinks like “terremoto” or “chicha”.
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Chile has a great variety of geographic zones, climates and indigenous towns. Is for this reason that our country could be considered a multicultural zone. This particularity makes Chile a tourist destination for many people that look for places with new cultures and so learn about our tradition and celebrations, enjoying it together with the chileans.
Chile is a country that has the most diverse and beatiful geography in the world, this feature of our country generates a lot of culture. Each culture makes celebrations. What I like the most is the La Tirana Festival, because I can see a mix between indigenous and catholics. Their dances are very cheerful with the most colorful clothing, also the music has a lot of rhythm.
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Last year I went to "La Tirana" one of Chile most important cultural festivals, this celebration honors the Virgin of Carmen patron saint of Chile. People dance for seven days and seven nights with the most colorful costumes and masks for exorcisms of demons. The religious celebration is an anual festivity in July at North of Chile
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Chile not only has beautiful places to visit, its a country with a lot of celebrations from north to south, from sea to mountain. Chileans enjoy the national and international music, celebrates the mix of spanish and indigenous cultures of Los Andes, eat delicius food and many other activities to show the unique identity of the southern country in the world.
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The festivals in Chile are known to be colorful and cheerful. The best is the ""pratriotic festivities" because many people come together to celebrate and enjoy a delicious roast, after dancing a "patita de cueca". Also you can play typical Chilean games and drink a sweet "chicha". If you are in Chile, you can't forget to eat a "empanada".
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In chile along the year we have different artistic performances showing our culture. Thousands and thousands of people come together to celebrate the different special dates, the religious and the secular ones. It's funny because that we have a lot of days off, a lot of them in the summer, cheering up our people.
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Chile is an entertaining country with a lot of music festival, typical festival, cultural festival, etc. I thought those are great festivals and are more popular in south america. I really recommended to go to those festivals because they are a beautiful experience and are more useful to learn. However , it is more expensive therefore you can save money.
Every year, in January the hottest month, I with my friends go to the park Brazil, into the park for three weeks there is a theater performance, all this thanks to “Santiago a mil”. Watch theater performance is very funny, especially for afternoons of summer when every people are hot. I always have to visits the theater performance because for me is the most beautiful art.
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The text talk about different activities realized in Chile, that represent us identity. For me, the best is Fiestas Patrias because is a date so important for us, also is very funny, it has much activities and is a good moment for enjoy in family. Additionally I think that articule has places and activities so important that reveals the beautiful culture chilena, abundant meanings and histories.
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First of all, the text talk about chilean celebrations for example La Tirana festival. This celebration is popular. I have never been in La Tirana but i would like to go to this festival. Besides I like the "Patriotic Festivities”, on September 18th, with my family we do a big party, we dance “cueca” and eat “empanada de pino”.
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Chile have many celebrations and beautiful place for know between it “Fiestas Patrias” in south of the country. The South is very cold because funny for friendly people, much animals and beautiful citys. My point of view is what Concepción is the best place for stay “Fiestas Patrias” also have much food and swallows delicious. The best “Chicha” stay there in Concepción
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Chile has a lot of festivals and celebrations , culture in your habitants is varied, for this ,you can find different types of celebrations ,principally artistic and religous. "Santiago a Mil" is realized during the first weeks of January , and this is my favorite festival because is a perfect oportunity to see a cultural show and of quality, at low cost or even free.
Last years, I went to see "The Festival with the Strength of the Sun". I went with two friends, we were take pictures. we are art students and photographs and we were investigating about the typical dances the indigenous cultures. I was more amazed, I was thinking that the dancers had many power and energy able of break the land. For me, "The Festival with the Strength of the Sun" is the most amazing festival the chile. Beside, the day of festival is my birthday.
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I am mapuche, but I haven´t had the opportunity to celebrate We Tripantu yet. However, I would like to participate together my parents someday, living the best ancestral experience and maybe, I could find my identity. At the moment I can go to other cultural festivals. Thank you very much for the information.
Chile is a country with beautiful and interesting places, also it is important party. I like the “fiestas patrias”, because the people are funnier and happier than other days. In “fiestas patrias” the people can go to festivals and air shows, also they can eat delicious indegenous foods. I with my family went to the “ramada” of the park Inés de Suarez, it was interesting, but the park was crowded.
Chile is a country with beautiful and interesting places, also it is important party. I like the “fiestas patrias”, because the people are funnier and happier than other days. In “fiestas patrias” the people can go to festivals and air shows, also they can eat delicious indegenous foods. I with my family went to the “ramada” of the park Inés de Suarez, it was interesting, but the park was crowded.
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Every year, my family and I celebrate the "Patriotic Festivities". Sometimes, we travel to Pichilemu. In this place, we go out to the “ramadas”, where we dance cueca and we eat typical food. This festivity is the funniest national festivity, and it celebrates in all the country. I think it was good for families because it’s a great festivity to enjoy together.
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ReplyDeleteThe article refers to the most important festivals of Chile. However in each festival the people give life to every party, they are singing, dancing or praying. All is beautiful , mystical, and happines.
ReplyDeleteI think it is more important the Mapuche new year, because they are our indigenous roots, and we can´t forget them.
Finally the article invited everybody to visit Chile.
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DeleteEvery year, on September 18, Chilean people celebrate the independence day. I think it was good for people who like eat the most traditional foods and know the Chilean culture. I thougth it was awesome. I really recommend it because you can go to partys and fondas, where you can dance “cueca” and drink traditional drinks like “terremoto” or “chicha”.
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ReplyDeleteChile has a great variety of geographic zones, climates and indigenous towns. Is for this reason that our country could be considered a multicultural zone. This particularity makes Chile a tourist destination for many people that look for places with new cultures and so learn about our tradition and celebrations, enjoying it together with the chileans.
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DeleteChile is a country that has the most diverse and beatiful geography in the world, this feature of our country generates a lot of culture. Each culture makes celebrations. What I like the most is the La Tirana Festival, because I can see a mix between indigenous and catholics. Their dances are very cheerful with the most colorful clothing, also the music has a lot of rhythm.
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ReplyDeleteLast year I went to "La Tirana" one of Chile most important cultural festivals, this celebration honors the Virgin of Carmen patron saint of Chile. People dance for seven days and seven nights with the most colorful costumes and masks for exorcisms of demons.
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DeleteChile not only has beautiful places to visit, its a country with a lot of celebrations from north to south, from sea to mountain. Chileans enjoy the national and international music, celebrates the mix of spanish and indigenous cultures of Los Andes, eat delicius food and many other activities to show the unique identity of the southern country in the world.
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DeleteThe festivals in Chile are known to be colorful and cheerful. The best is the ""pratriotic festivities" because many people come together to celebrate and enjoy a delicious roast, after dancing a "patita de cueca". Also you can play typical Chilean games and drink a sweet "chicha". If you are in Chile, you can't forget to eat a "empanada".
ReplyDeleteCorrect use of the vocabulary seen in class and grammar structures. There is a great attempt to use more complex points. You should include more connectors to develo p your ideas in depth.
DeleteIn chile along the year we have different artistic performances showing our culture. Thousands and thousands of people come together to celebrate the different special dates, the religious and the secular ones. It's funny because that we have a lot of days off, a lot of them in the summer, cheering up our people.
ReplyDeleteThere is an attempt to use complex structures, but you should include connectors to link your ideas clearly. Also, try to use more structures seen in class.
DeleteChile is an entertaining country with a lot of music festival, typical festival, cultural festival, etc. I thought those are great festivals and are more popular in south america. I really recommended to go to those festivals because they are a beautiful experience and are more useful to learn. However , it is more expensive therefore you can save money.
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DeleteEvery year, in January the hottest month, I with my friends go to the park Brazil, into the park for three weeks there is a theater performance, all this thanks to “Santiago a mil”. Watch theater performance is very funny, especially for afternoons of summer when every people are hot. I always have to visits the theater performance because for me is the most beautiful art.
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ReplyDeleteThe text talk about different activities realized in Chile, that represent us identity. For me, the best is Fiestas Patrias because is a date so important for us, also is very funny, it has much activities and is a good moment for enjoy in family.
ReplyDeleteAdditionally I think that articule has places and activities so important that reveals the beautiful culture chilena, abundant meanings and histories.
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DeleteFirst of all, the text talk about chilean celebrations for example La Tirana festival. This celebration is popular. I have never been in La Tirana but i would like to go to this festival. Besides I like the "Patriotic Festivities”, on September 18th, with my family we do a big party, we dance “cueca” and eat “empanada de pino”.
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DeleteChile have many celebrations and beautiful place for know between it “Fiestas Patrias” in south of the country. The South is very cold because funny for friendly people, much animals and beautiful citys.
ReplyDeleteMy point of view is what Concepción is the best place for stay “Fiestas Patrias” also have much food and swallows delicious. The best “Chicha” stay there in Concepción
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DeleteChile has a lot of festivals and celebrations , culture in your habitants is varied, for this ,you can find different types of celebrations ,principally artistic and religous. "Santiago a Mil" is realized during the first weeks of January , and this is my favorite festival because is a perfect oportunity to see a cultural show and of quality, at low cost or even free.
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DeleteLast years, I went to see "The Festival with the Strength of the Sun". I went with two friends, we were take pictures. we are art students and photographs and we were investigating about the typical dances the indigenous cultures. I was more amazed, I was thinking that the dancers had many power and energy able of break the land. For me, "The Festival with the Strength of the Sun" is the most amazing festival the chile. Beside, the day of festival is my birthday.
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DeleteI am mapuche, but I haven´t had the opportunity to celebrate We Tripantu yet. However, I would like to participate together my parents someday, living the best ancestral experience and maybe, I could find my identity. At the moment I can go to other cultural festivals.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much for the information.
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DeleteChile is a country with beautiful and interesting places, also it is important party. I like the “fiestas patrias”, because the people are funnier and happier than other days. In “fiestas patrias” the people can go to festivals and air shows, also they can eat delicious indegenous foods.
ReplyDeleteI with my family went to the “ramada” of the park Inés de Suarez, it was interesting, but the park was crowded.
Chile is a country with beautiful and interesting places, also it is important party. I like the “fiestas patrias”, because the people are funnier and happier than other days. In “fiestas patrias” the people can go to festivals and air shows, also they can eat delicious indegenous foods.
ReplyDeleteI with my family went to the “ramada” of the park Inés de Suarez, it was interesting, but the park was crowded.
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